Whistle and I'll Come to you by Susan Hill

Tremain presents Lev's psychological state not through direct statement but through the precise quality of what he attends to — his consciousness is revealed by what it notices, what it returns to, and what it cannot stop thinking about. This technique of indirect characterisation is one of the story's most sophisticated achievements.

Lev's language — or rather, the language of the close third-person narrator who inhabits his perspective — is marked by a quality of hypervigilant specificity. He notices small details with unusual precision: the texture of the coach seat, the smell of food he cannot afford to eat, the faces of the other passengers. This attentiveness is not aesthetic pleasure but anxiety management: a mind under acute pressure fixes on the concrete and specific because the abstract is overwhelming. The cigarettes are the most persistent object of this attention — returned to, lit, held, watched — and Tremain deploys them with an understanding of how ritual and repetition function for the psychologically distressed. Each cigarette is a small organising act in a life that has temporarily lost its structure.

The internal monologue that Tremain constructs for Lev is notable for what it does not say directly. Lev does not tell us that he is frightened of England, that he misses his wife, that the responsibility for his daughter Marina weighs on him, that his displacement is acute. Instead, we arrive at these understandings through the oblique route of his associations — the things he thinks about when he is not trying to think about them, the memories that surface when the cigarette smoke rises. Tremain trusts the reader to make the inference that Lev cannot bring himself to make directly.

The language of memory is particularly carefully handled. When Lev's thoughts move toward his past — toward Marina, toward the forests, toward his dead wife — the prose becomes momentarily warmer and more specific, the catalogue of sensory detail softening into recollection. These passages are brief; the present (the coach, England approaching, the anxiety of the journey) always returns. This rhythmic movement — present anxiety, memory's warmth, present anxiety again — is the formal structure of Lev's psychological state: a man trying to live in the future while still inhabiting the past, using cigarettes as the ritual punctuation between one state and the other.

Hill creates atmosphere in 'The Whistle' through the convergence of several techniques — setting, syntactic control, strategic ambiguity, and the conventions of Gothic fiction — that together produce an experience of sustained, unresolved dread. The atmosphere is not merely described but enacted: the reader feels it in the rhythm of the prose before they can fully articulate what it consists of.

The most foundational technique is pathetic fallacy. Hill's landscape — cold, dark, windswept, inhospitable — functions not merely as setting but as an externalisation of the protagonist's psychological state. The environment offers no comfort: it is a landscape from which human warmth has been entirely withdrawn, and its physical properties (the cold, the darkness, the wind that carries the whistle) mirror the protagonist's interior state of unresolved fear. Hill builds this correspondence carefully — the setting is established before the whistle arrives, so that when the sound comes it feels not like an intrusion from outside but like a manifestation of what the setting has already been preparing us for.

Hill's syntactic control is equally deliberate. Long, atmospheric sentences carry the scene-setting passages, their subordination and accumulation creating a sense of measured, unhurried establishment — and then short, declarative sentences interrupt without warning at moments of crisis. The rhythm of these interruptions is itself alarming: the prose's tempo changes before the content announces that something has happened, so the reader experiences the shock of disruption in the sentence structure itself.

The whistle's ambiguity is the story's central atmospheric achievement. Hill refuses to resolve whether the sound is external (wind, a human figure) or internal (the protagonist's own fear made audible). This refusal is not a withholding but an insistence: the ambiguity is the atmosphere. A resolved explanation — 'it was the wind all along', or 'it was a ghost' — would puncture the dread rather than sustain it. By keeping the source indeterminate, Hill keeps the reader in the protagonist's uncertainty, unable to retreat to the safe position of knowing more than the character. The reader is as unsettled as the protagonist, and this shared condition is the story's most lasting effect.

Both Tremain and Hill write about characters who carry loss within them — but the nature of the loss, and the formal means by which each author presents it, differ substantially, and these differences reveal two distinct understandings of what loss does to a human consciousness.

Lev's loss in Tremain's 'Significant Cigarettes' is named, biographical, and ongoing. He has lost his wife — her death is part of the biographical backstory that the story constructs for him — and he is in the process of losing his former life through migration. He is on a coach to England, moving away from everything that constituted his identity: his language, his landscape, his community, his role as father and husband in a place that knew him. This movement — voluntary but economically coerced — is itself a form of loss: he is trading the familiar self for the unknown migrant self, and the trade has not yet resolved. Tremain presents this loss through the accumulation of small details — the cigarettes he smokes with a ritual persistence that is also a memorial practice, the memories that surface when his attention catches on a sensory trigger. The loss is not declared; it seeps through the interstices of the prose.

Hill's protagonist in 'The Whistle' experiences a different kind of loss — less biographical than existential. What the character is losing, or fears losing, is the capacity to trust their own perception of reality. The whistle, heard but unexplained, creates a situation in which the protagonist cannot determine whether their senses are reliable — whether what they hear is real or internal. This epistemic loss (the loss of certainty about one's own experience) is more disorienting than biographical loss precisely because it cannot be grieved: one cannot mourn the loss of a dead wife in the same way one can mourn the loss of confidence in one's own perception. Hill's Gothic mode specialises in this kind of loss, which is why Gothic fiction so frequently features characters whose sanity is in question.

Similarly, both writers use restraint as their primary formal technique for presenting loss. Tremain does not let Lev declare his grief; Hill does not let the protagonist name their fear. In both cases, what is not said carries as much weight as what is: the reader infers the depth of Lev's loss from what he cannot bring himself to think about directly, just as the reader infers the depth of the protagonist's dread from what they cannot bring themselves to explain. Whereas Tremain's restraint produces sympathy and identification, Hill's produces anxiety and unease — the same technique in the service of different emotional effects.

Tremain presents the idea of a new beginning with a honesty that refuses easy consolation: the journey to England is a new beginning, but it is also a loss, and the story holds both of these truths simultaneously without resolving them into either optimism or despair. This double vision is the story's greatest achievement.

The coach journey is the story's central structural metaphor for new beginning. Lev is in motion — moving forward, physically, through a landscape that is becoming unfamiliar — and the directionality of that motion (away from the past, toward the future) is the most basic formal image of starting again. But Tremain immediately complicates this image: the forward motion of the coach is accompanied by the backward motion of Lev's memory, which moves in the opposite direction, toward the life he has left. The coach moves toward England; Lev's consciousness moves toward home. New beginning and loss exist in the same body at the same time.

Lydia is the story's emblem of ambivalence about new beginning. She is Lev's fellow passenger — another migrant, another person in transit, another consciousness managing the gap between the life left and the life ahead. Her response to Lev's offered cigarette — hesitant, then accepted, then the beginning of conversation — is Tremain's image of what new beginning looks like in practice: not a grand gesture or a resolved moment but a small, incremental human contact across a social distance. The new beginning is a cigarette offered and accepted; it is conversation beginning in a shared language neither of them entirely commands; it is two isolated people discovering they are not entirely alone. It is tentative, provisional, and genuine.

Tremain's language for the English landscape — glimpsed through the coach window as the journey progresses — is notably unromantic. England is grey, wet, unremarkable: it offers no picturesque welcome, no visual promise of the better life Lev is moving toward. This refusal to romanticise the destination is itself a formal choice — Tremain will not console Lev, or the reader, with a reassuring image of England-as-opportunity. The new beginning is real, and it is unglamorous, and both things are true.